In 2008, I went to New Zealand with my husband for our honeymoon.
It was my favorite trip, because we did everything for this trip by ourself.
I got married in November, 2008. Originally, we wanted to go to the country
in Europe for our honeymoon. But it was very cold in November, so we changed
to New Zealand finally. Because New Zealand is in Southern hemisphere, and it
was in summer at that time.
Hanchi, my husband, arranged the travelling route, ordered the hotel, booked
the flight, rented the car by himself. Although he was very tried for doing
these things, but he felt happy and satisfied when he finished. When we stepped
on the land in New Zealand, I was so exciting. Comparing with Taiwan, it was so
different. You could see many sheeps, cows, deers everywhere. And the mountains
are so higher than Taiwan. People who lived there were so tall, with golden hair,
and white skin.
One activity that I was most impressive was the hiking on the glacier. It was
raining that day, we wore many clothes, and wore a waterproof coat outside. In
the beginning, I could do my best to follow others. But I was so short and weak,
and soon, I almost couldn’t go any far. I needed take rest. Hanchi help me
communicate with the guide that we wanted to stay here for resting, and they could
keep going forward. But the guide didn’t agree, because it was very dangerous on
glacier. For taking care me, He changed the order of the team, and putted me behind
him. If I needed to rest, everyone rested. By this way, I went to the target finally.
It was a very special experience. It was so painful, but also very sweet. I felt
painful, because I was very tired to couldn’t go any far. But I felt sweet for the
guide’s patient and nice. Anyway, I liked this trip.

I found some problems and corrected as following. 1.) "Althought" cannot use with "but"... But it's neither a good way nor a seriouse problem. 2.) "Mountains are so higher than Taiwan." it's not correct, has to use as "higher than Taiwan's" or "Taiwan's mountains". 3.)"I could do my best to follow others."Had better write "I do my best to...." 4.)"But I was so short...."Can use "I was too short to cought...." 5.)"take care of someone." not "take care someone" 6.)behind "of" him 要注意句子的冗長和文法以及介系詞的運用和常見片語 才可以使文章更流暢喔 以上皆為敝人淺薄之見 請多指教
感謝指教~ 請問你是......鈞鈞嗎? 還是Amy啊?
是鈞喔, 不是我...
真的假的!!! 鈞鈞有這麼厲害!!! 天啊~~~我一整個羞愧到死...
唉啊...鈞鈞正在學啊, 所以OK的啦~ 別急, 没關係...慢慢來, 走出去開始學就對了..